MONDAY: Concluding Paragraphs

3/30/2015

Practical Math in Action

1.) LA/SPEECH FEST:

Complete your concluding paragraph on your essay speech/essay skeleton.
Complete writing your concluding paragraph on your essay document on Google Drive so I can review it. Your document should have your introductory paragraph and your concluding paragraph
Be sure to follow the criteria given in class today.

2.) POST A RESPONSE:

Watch this video and try to determine the big idea.
In your opinion, what do you think is the big idea of this short video?
Support your opinion with 3 supporting points (statistics, examples, facts, quotes, etc).
In your own words, what is the lesson learned that the video maker wants the audience to take away with them after watching it?
Give two students some feedback about following the requirement components of today's post.
Respond to any descriptive feedback given to you and edit/revise your original post according to the comments you receive.

VIDEO LINKS:
Inspirational Video

Xbox man

3/30/2015 10:19:46 am

I think the big idea is that you should never get close to anyone who is sick or you will get sick too. Also when you give someone food don't keep giving them food for free because then they just keep coming back. Also you should be nice to people but still, pay for the things you get. I think this is about how you need to be aware of yourself and your actions.

TweetyBird

3/30/2015 10:58:48 am

You should add some quotes or statistics.

Goofy

3/30/2015 01:46:13 pm

Xbox man one day I see you on the side walk with a sign saying please help me anything will help and I pull up and give you a fruit salad and water and say that will be $10 what would you think then.

Azbo

3/30/2015 10:51:30 am

Hi.

TweetyBird

3/30/2015 10:57:53 am

I think that the big idea is that you should always try to be nice, even if it is a small deed in the future it could change your life. So always "kill people with kindness" and it could pay off. Studies show that if you do a random act of kindess more people will start being kind too. Apparently kindess gives people a good feeling which causes us to help others. It's kind of like that video of the construction worker who helped the boy who helped the old lady and the cycle kept going on and on until it ended at the construction worker again. I think that the video maker wants us to know that if you help someone one day they will help you. Like a boomerang you throw it and it comes back to you. So if you're kind to others others will be kind to you. Treat others the way you want to be treated.

Azbo

3/30/2015 12:15:59 pm

@Tweety Bird - Good job Tweetybird I like how you connected with the Lifeboat video. It is the same sort of concept ;-).

Azbo

3/30/2015 11:16:07 am

I think the big idea is to just give be nice and help strangers. No mater who or where you are. As we can see we have the boy that I assume is poor and his mom is sick so he steals stuff he can use to heal her but he gets cought and then the good samariten paid and gave him viggie soup for his mom. Then since he gave him those later when he was sick the boy which was now a grown adult paid for the procedure (I think) then after it shows "giving is the best communication". It also inspires you in different ways. The other supporting detail is that the woman he stole it from showed no respect to him that he was trying to help an ill family member.

Tacosaur

3/30/2015 01:58:37 pm

@azbo good response I agree you had some really good points.

Azbo

3/31/2015 12:18:43 am

Thank you Tacosaur.

Hero of ages

3/30/2015 11:37:07 am

I think that you should help people whoever they are and where ever they live and his daughter will stay with him at all times and she dose not have enough money to pay for the hospital and you should take control of your actions.

Gooner

3/30/2015 12:55:55 pm

You need to re read the criteria. Your paragraph is too short with no supporting sentences.

Pebbles

3/30/2015 12:57:57 pm

@ Hero Of Ages, where are your supporting sentences?

Goofy

3/30/2015 01:48:09 pm

what about your three support sentences and big idea and thats your lesson on your post right.

Hero of ages

3/30/2015 01:54:07 pm

I think the big idea is to be nice and you never know something nice might happen in the future like the kid stole something from a woman to help her mom and she did not help him but the dad payed for the items and then when he has a heart attack the boy grows up to be a doctor and payed for the medical bill and then I think he recovered so remember the golden rule respect others as they would to you.

Gooner

3/30/2015 12:07:37 pm

The big idea is that a nice deed can go a long way. So, even if it feels like you are just giving somebody something small, you are actually changing their life.

Azbo

3/30/2015 12:17:21 pm

Read the criteria carefully... 3 supporting sentences. I like the big idea you came up with.

Gooner

3/30/2015 12:50:36 pm

Revised again.

I think the big idea is a nice deed can go a long way. I think this for three reasons. 1 because the man gave a little child some food and medicine (I think) 2 because the woman and man were giving food to people and 3 because just because of that little deed, a mans life was saved.If you do something small, it could lead to a big thing. Like what if you give a homeless person 2 dollars and you think its nothing but they end up going to Mc Donalds for a burger and they get offered a job. It could change their life.

Gooner

3/30/2015 12:19:38 pm

*_REVISED_*

The big idea is the a small deed can go a long way. I think this because the man gave the child things to save his mom. (The video wasn't that clear but I think this is what happened.) Than in return, the boy, who was now a man, paid for him to survive. So, in conclusion, if you think you are doing something simple, like giving 2 dollars to a homeless person, you could actually be doing something amazing. Like what if that person went to Mc Donalds for a burger and than got offered a job? You never know.

Gooner

3/30/2015 12:54:02 pm

I think the big idea is a nice deed can go a long way. I think this because of three reasons. 1 because the man gave the child stuff to make his mom better. 2 because the man and the woman were giving random people things and 3 because a small deed saved a mans life. In conclusion if we all did something small it could lead to great things. Like giving a homeless person 2$ could mean nothing to you, but they go to Mc Donalds to buy a burger and get offered a job.

LUYSA Soccer Player

4/2/2015 12:15:58 am

@Gooner, great job! However, one suggestion for you is to add at least 3 supporting sentences like examples, quotes, and statistics.

Rainbow Unicorn

3/30/2015 12:41:15 pm

@Mr. Hong we didn't get any criteria sheet today.

Mr. Hong link

3/30/2015 01:15:45 pm

@ Rainbow Unicorn - Mrs. B discussed the different parts of a concluding paragraph. This was review. Ask yourself, what is the criteria for a concluding paragraph? What do you have to include? What are the different types?

Rainbow Unicorn

3/30/2015 01:27:18 pm

Okay then, never mind.

Rainbow Unicorn

4/1/2015 01:42:24 pm

@Mr.Hong never mind.

Rainbow Unicorn

3/30/2015 12:56:34 pm

I think that the big idea was that if you do nice things for people then someone will do something nice for you. For example, it's kinda like karma if you do something good the universe will reward you. As someone once said: life is like a boomerang what you give, you get.

I think that the lesson learned or what the author is trying tell us is, value life and be nice to the people around you, because you never know when your gonna go.

Julio

3/30/2015 01:19:46 pm

Your big idea and lesson are completely different.

Me.potato

3/30/2015 02:35:45 pm

I think the big idea is that you should always give and do things for other people even if it doesn't do anything for you just because it's nice. One of the reasons for this is that when the kid got in trouble he helped him and so when the old guy was in trouble he found out the cure for it and paid for it.

Rainbow Unicorn

4/1/2015 01:43:00 pm

@Julio It doesn't have to be the same.

Cookielover

3/30/2015 01:09:35 pm

I think the big idea is that sharing is going to help you later when you need it the most. I think that because first that kid was stealing and that women was pushing him then the man ran over and payed for what he stole and gave him soup. Then he gave that other man soup because he didn't look that healthy but he did look hungry so the nice man gave him some of his soup. Then all those people that he helped payed for his medical bill and the girl looked very happy.

Julio

3/30/2015 01:18:55 pm

In the end of the video what was the lesson learned?

Julio

3/30/2015 01:17:46 pm

I think that the big idea of the video was that you should be helpful and nice to everybody because you never know when you will need help and then they will act the same to you. In the video the boy grows up to be a doctor. He remembers the kindness the man showed him when he was a boy and because of it he decides to repay the man by helping him for free. If the man didn't show kindness then the doctor might not have helped him. Also the boy grew up appreciating what the man had done so much that he spent much of his life helping others. Today there are millions of people all around the world that are starving and even homeless. If we help them then we might make a difference in someone elses life too. If we were poor and homeless we would want someone to the same for us too. By everyone showing kindness to everyone else around them the world would be a much nicer place to live.

Tacosaur

3/30/2015 02:01:47 pm

@julio. I too believe that helping others makes a difference in people's lives. Also by showing kindness the world would be a better place.

OMGCOTTONCANDY

3/30/2015 01:23:58 pm

I think the big idea is about how giving is the best communication. I think this is true because instead of leaving the boy with nothing he gave him what he needed. For example paying it forward could someone day. To illustrate a little deed can go along way. " Give what you have to someone it may be better than you dare to think".

Puffle

4/1/2015 01:40:28 pm

I liked how you explained you big idea in 3 good points but you can also check you grammar and explain what you learned from the video.

Pebbles

3/30/2015 01:27:51 pm

What do I think about the video you may ask? Well you will just have to find out! I think the big idea is one random act of kindness can lead to many wonders. A wonderful quote that represents what I say is...
“We rise by lifting others.”-Robert Ingersoll a Lawyer, A Civil War Veteran, Political Leader, And Orator Of United States. It also reminded meow the video where the construction worker did one random act of kindness and then that kept going on until it came back to him. I just think that people should start doing this stuff more often because it can change someones life. In conclusion, a random act of kindness can help someone and then you will receive it back. So... what do you think about the video?

Yogi Bear

3/30/2015 01:29:48 pm

I think that the big idea from the video is that if you give it will always come back to you. There is a saying that says "What goes around comes around comes around." That saying can mean good things or bad things but in this case it is good, since the older man gave the kid the soup and then when the older man was dying the expenses were payed by the boy. I think that the thing that the creator wanted us to pull from it was that if you give you will always receive.

LUYSA Soccer Player

4/2/2015 12:18:00 am

@Yogi Bear, great job! However one suggestion for you is to maybe add more tansition words like firstly, secondly, to conclude, etc...... Overall, great job!

batman

3/30/2015 01:40:17 pm

I think the big idea is that if someone gives you something you should repay them with something else. Like when the guy did not have anything to eat so they pay back the bill to save the father. Also the guy payed for the boys medic for his sick mom.

Goofy

3/30/2015 01:42:43 pm

I think the big idea is that you should give to people and in the future they will give back somehow for example I give a homeless person food and water but one day I get pulled over by a cop and thats him and he lets me go with a warning or he's the guy I rear end and he forgives me. I think the lesson was give to people and you'l get back.

Fish sticks

4/1/2015 10:17:48 am

I like your post but just remember to look over it before you post in case there are any spelling, punctuation, or grammar errors.

Tacosaur

3/30/2015 01:54:21 pm

The big idea is you should try and help out people in need. You should treat others the way you would want to be treated when you are in need.
In this short video the boy stole to help out his mother who was sick, he then got caught but even the store keeper was not nice to him. I know it's wrong to steal but the lady should have spoken with the boy to find out why he stole. Then along came the man to help out the boy as I believe he understood the position the boy was in and gave him some free soup and paid for his medication.
This man helped out a boy in need and when the man got sick and was in hospital this boy now grown up repayed this man by paying his hospital bill.
Helping out someone makes you a better person and in return helps others become better people too. We should always lend a helping hand when we can it also makes you feel good that you were able to help someone.

Teddy bear

3/30/2015 02:12:29 pm

I think the big idea is try to be nice to others. If you do something nice for other it will comeback. For example the man gave the medicine and soup to the child. Then later when the man is sick child helped him. In addition to, "Help others to achieve their dreams and you will achieve yours." Also the research show that people who gave more to charity will 43% more likely to be happy than other who didn't. You can make much nicer place by helping others.

Sargent Sqweecers

3/30/2015 02:44:35 pm

I think the big idea is do a good dead and one day that will in some way help you. I think this because in the video the kids mother was sick and the other person payed for what he took so in the future he kept helping people when that man was in need other people helped him.

LUYSA Soccer Player

3/30/2015 02:51:51 pm

(Post A Response)

WOW! That was one kind and one beautiful video I had ever seen! And to be honest when I watched it the first time I didnt get what had happend but, when I watched it the second time I actually cried. Why? Well, because when I saw kindness going on in the video, like the man giving the boy food, and the boy who paid for the guy to get better it made the daughter really happy and in shock that the boy paid money for the guy to get better. Above all, I think the big idea is ,'Kindness". Secondly, did you know that if you be kind to someone they will be kind to you? Well, I did ! Infact, when I was kind to someone, they actually started to be kind to everyone else. Thirdly, this is a quote that is very powerful to me, ''A kind heart is a fountain of gladness, making everything in its vicinity freshen into smiles.'' - Washington Irving. Lastly, research shows that being kind is the most powerful emotion. In conclusion, I think the video maker wanted the audience to know that if you'll be kind to someone they will be kind to you. What do you think?

Puffle

3/30/2015 03:03:09 pm

In my opinion, I think that the big idea is that one random act of kindness can really change the world. The world would be such a better place if everyone was giving. First of all, if I were to put in an extra (more than the average) tip for someone at the restaurant I'm sure it will make their day by getting a little bit amount of money with their paycheck. So it could really make that person happier. Second of all, I could have saved someone's life. If that person I tipped was trying to pay for someone's medication or surgery and they were a poor family then maybe recieving the tip I gave them would give them the amount of money needed. Third of all, "You have to be the change that you wish to see in the world," quote from Ghandi. It's the littlest things that make someone's day. Whether it's helping with the door, or walking an eldery or child across the street, or even helping someone unload their car. That person could've had a bad day but you just made it better. Giving also comes with recieving so when that boy became a doctor and helped out the man that gave him money 30 years ago, he was repaying what the man gave him. He saved his mother's life, so now he's saving the man.

I learned that something little can really change the world and that the simplest things in life can make someone really happy or a bunch of people happy.

Murphamy4life

3/31/2015 12:11:30 am

I think the big idea is what goes around comes around. For example the guy was really nice to everyone and would help people who needed help. Then one person he had helped helped him with his medical bills. Also the guys kindness made the people who he had helped kind.

Butterflypuppy

4/1/2015 02:01:17 pm

@Murphany4life

What made you thin labout the saying what does around comes around?

Billy Bob

3/31/2015 12:36:10 am

@Mr.Hong. Hi! I am in Amsterdam enjoying the experience of being in a new country. You told me before I left to write about what I learned each day would that be my online work or do I also have to do the post.

Oracle

3/31/2015 12:52:11 am

What I thought was the big idea is that helping out others in need can bring a good deed back to you some other time when you need it. Like how in that video it showed the little boy stealing, but the dad of the girl payed for it and gave him some other stuff for his mom due to sickness or something. And later on in the future, her dad passes out or something and the little boy who's now grown up helps her out by doing the medications for free, because they helped him out when he was in need, and so he wanted to return the favor. So the lesson learned here is that helping out others more in need is more important than nothing.

When I come in early at-school, I'll rearrange this to an essay format due to internet problems yesterday.

Oracle

3/31/2015 12:53:29 am

Along with adding more things to it. I'm in a bit of a rush this morning.

Fish sticks

3/31/2015 01:15:20 am

I think the big idea is that if you are nice and do kind things for other people then most of the time people will do nice things for you. i think this because when someone was nice to the little boy when the little boy grew up he was nice.

If that was wrong it is because my computer dosent have sound.

Pebbles

4/1/2015 10:26:07 am

@ Fish Sticks, you need some supporting sentences.

Snapping turtle

3/31/2015 01:26:39 am

I think the big idea is that if you do a good thing, good things come to you. So for example if you give maybe 2 dollars to a homeless person they will buy food and something usually good will happen later like the person gets a job and buys stuff for himself then pays you back later.

Billy Bob

3/31/2015 09:56:48 am

I think the idea is to help others and to pay it forward. My supporting ideas are:
The man helped the boy in the past to help his mom recover.
The man helped someone in need and once he was in need others treated him how he treated them.
The boy in the beginning was unable to buy medical help so the man helped him, then once the man was unable to buy medical care the boy helped him.

Butterflypuppy

4/1/2015 01:59:56 pm

I think the big idea is telling me that if you are nice to people they are often nice back. Like the old saying treat people the way you want to be treated.

Cloud barston

4/1/2015 02:02:22 pm

I think that the big idea is that helping others will eventually help you. For example, kind of like the concept of pay it forward. The man helped the boy with money for His mom's sickness and gave him free food and in the future that paid of my the boy paying for tthe medical bill for the man.

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