Responding to Feedback to Improve our Work

2/21/2017

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Although you may not have noticed yet, Mr. Redican and I have given you some feedback directly on your powerful response Google Documents. Check your email and your Google Docs to read through our comments and the comments from your peers. Your homework assignment this evening for Language Arts will be to follow the instructions below and do some edits/revisions to your work. Remember, the goal of the feedback process is for you to see areas in your writing that you can improve on.

1.) MATH: Any unfinished work.

2.) LANGUAGE ARTS:

Check your Gmail and your Google Docs.
Read all the feedback you received on you Google Documents carefully!
Make any necessary edits/revisions/changes/additions to your work based on the feedback you received on your document and/or on your peer assessment form. DO NOT LOSE THIS FORM! You must hand this in with your final draft when you are finished later this week.
Go through each and every item of feedback you received and think about what you can do to improve your writing.
Add to your personal response by using your graphic organizer, lyrics, and visible thinking sheets.

3.) POST A RESPONSE:

Watch this video.
List three jobs they mention in the video that may interest you.
Do some research and list 2 interesting facts about the three jobs you listed.
Provide reliable sources for your information (person, website, book, encyclopedia, etc)
Ask one other student a question about the 3 jobs they posted.
Respond to any questions you receive.

VIDEO LINKS:
Career Clusters - Arts, Audio Visual Technology, and Communication

cbhanvec

2/21/2017 10:42:01 am

first chance

Avy

2/21/2017 10:42:10 am

FIRST

ali

2/21/2017 10:42:16 am

first

vera

2/21/2017 10:42:26 am

second

DAVIDR

2/21/2017 10:42:41 am

THIRD

jasmine

2/21/2017 10:42:46 am

2nd

Jacob Was Here

2/21/2017 10:42:53 am

Mr. Hong

2/21/2017 04:38:41 pm

@ Jacob - What did he say?

Jesse

2/21/2017 03:45:57 pm

Photographer
-It takes a lot of practice, creativity, and knowledge about cameras to become a true photographer.
-Using computers photographers can enhance scanned or digital images to create a desired effect.

Lighting technicians
- Your salary depend on your experience.
- Lighting technicians set up and operate lighting equipment in television and film.

Newspaper publisher
-The average pay for a Newspaper Publisher is $96,432 per year.
-Most people in this job have more than five years' experience

https://www.google.ca/url?sa=t&source=web&rct=j&url=http://www.careereducationadvisor.com/Become-a-Photographer.htm&ved=0ahUKEwjUjZnyq6LSAhVL_WMKHb27COkQFggaMAA&usg=AFQjCNF-zv8JycBXXF2i2zGW_lSQKQr_nA

https://www.google.ca/url?sa=t&source=web&rct=j&url=https://www.prospects.ac.uk/job-profiles/lighting-technician-broadcasting-film-video&ved=0ahUKEwiT1I2xrqLSAhUGymMKHdfuDWEQFggaMAA&usg=AFQjCNFQjV0EAYLcGHzZBbnRmmsNyJnMNQ

https://www.google.ca/url?sa=t&source=web&rct=j&url=http://www.payscale.com/research/US/Job%3DNewspaper_Publisher/Salary&ved=0ahUKEwi92dalr6LSAhUL_mMKHXjECpkQFggdMAE&usg=AFQjCNFZOh-6K8DHlxAjRCCPJN6gS0hafg

Richard

2/21/2017 05:22:15 pm

For a newspaper writer why would you said they make $96,432 per year for an average newspaper writer. do they make the exact amount?

Mr. Hong

2/21/2017 07:20:21 pm

@ Richard - This is likely just an average salary. Some may make $60,000 and some may make $100,000. Salaries vary depending on education and experience.

Logan

2/21/2017 03:55:39 pm

Actor. To be an actor you need good communication skills. You will also need a BOOMING voice.

Athlete. To be this you need to be in good shape. You also need to be friends with everybody.

Singer. To be a singer you need a good voice. You also would need to be able to rhyme.

I used my own BACKROUND KNOWLEDGE

Ozem

2/21/2017 04:51:43 pm

@Logan read the PAR message again. Mr Hong never put "Add the things you need to become a ___."
He just said to put 2 facts.

Logan

2/21/2017 05:26:12 pm

It is kinda like facts tho I said you need these skills

Ozem

2/21/2017 07:07:59 pm

Needs not facts

Ozem

2/21/2017 07:08:50 pm

Facts not needs* they are different

Shmil

2/21/2017 04:44:43 pm

Artist
- It actually costs $2,000,000 to make one anime episode.
- The skills you'll need to have for this is creativity, courage, and knowledge.

Actor
-According to the Bureau of Labor Statistics, the median hourly wage for actors in 2012 was $20.26.
- The skills you'll need for this job is DETERMINATION, knowledge, strength, and dramatic techniques.

Singer
- The skills needed to be a singer are courage, knowledge, and a good listener
- You have to sing from your stomach or chest, not the throat so you can sing well. What I mean is make sure you don't sing from your throat.

Sources:

http://takelessons.com/blog/how-long-to-learn-to-sing

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Music_artist_(occupation)

https://www.quora.com/How-much-money-does-an-average-famous-singer-make-per-album

https://www.mymajors.com/career/singers/skills/

http://work.chron.com/much-money-visual-artists-make-year-10538.html

http://factfile.org/8-facts-about-being-an-artist

https://www.theguardian.com/education/mortarboard/2013/feb/21/10-things-art-teachers-wont-teach-you

Mr. Hong

2/21/2017 04:56:17 pm

@ Shmil - $2,000,000!!!! WOW! That's amazing! I didn't know that it was so expensive! I wonder how much a Disney movie would cost to make? For example, I wonder how much money was required for Moana to be created?

Ozem

2/21/2017 05:14:34 pm

Photographer
-The very first digital camera was made in 1975 by the Kodak Company
-the number of photographs clicked every two minutes is same as the number of pictures clicked by mankind in 1800's

http://factslegend.org/30-interesting-photography-facts/

Artist
-Da Vinci’s other most famous work which was the "The Last Supper" was based off of the religion Christian and it was about Jesus having the last supper with his disciples.
-Jackson Pollock was known for his abstract painting which focuses on his emotions.

http://mentalfloss.com/article/58387/15-things-you-didnt-know-about-famous-art

Athlete.
-Micheal Jordan was the best basketball player in the NBA before he retired.
-Usain Bolt is one of the most famous runners.

Richard

2/21/2017 05:19:14 pm

Newspaper Writer
=========================
- An average News paper publisher makes in USA is about $96,000 per year.
- They need to know how to work printers, now their navigation to put all the news papers and a drivers licenses.

Dancer
=========================
- A regular ballet dancer makes $24,00 although they don't usually dance 52 weeks per years.
- The skills you need for a dancer is to be healthy and flexible.

Artist
=========================
- If you're a very good artist you can earn over $80,000 within a year or if you're like Pablo Picasso you can make millions. But if you suck and you're not good at being an artist you can make lower then $20,000 or even lower.
- To be a good artist you need imagination, creativity, paint supply's or a hammer and nail if you're a carver.

http://www.payscale.com/research/US/Job=Newspaper_Publisher/Salary
http://study.com/news_reporter_education.html
http://www.theartcareerproject.com/the-right-steps-toward-a-dance-career/103/
http://www.theartcareerproject.com/shape-your-life-with-a-sculpting-career/363/

ben

2/21/2017 06:25:40 pm

Singer
A singer has to be able to combine singing with his/her own knowledge and taking instructions from the director.
You sing what is provided to you by the company.
http://work.chron.com/singing-career-10967.html

Athlete
Athletes spend a good part of their life practicing.
Most professional athletes played their sport in high school/college and Also in their athlete career.

Painter
To be creative.
be open minded

Jaci

2/21/2017 06:52:31 pm

🌟🍼👶🏻Jobs👶🏻🍼🌟

🌟🍼👶🏻Visual artist👶🏻🍼🌟

Reason- I picked visual artist is because they can draw a portrait of you and they won't dispoint you since they work hard at what they do.

Note- I couldn't find anything interesting about visual artist that I thought was good so I am gonna just write about 25 amazing interesting facts about famous artist that you may not know.

1} Fact- John James Audubon painted 435 birds in his lifetime.

2} Fact- Leonardo da Vinci was really sensitive when it came towards animal cruelty that he even brought a cage of birds and set them free.

🌟🍼👶🏻Interior designer👶🏻🍼🌟

Reason- they can do anything that you want them to do they can even pick any pattern that you please for your interior. I wouldn't mind being an interior designer because I would like to make costom made furniture for my family and friends. I would even make my self rococo furniture because they remind me of furniture that would be in a big expensive mansion. And they style rococo reminds me of the 1800's :3.

1} Fact- interior designers don't just stick to fixing houses they also help furnishing and designing restaurants,airports,hotels and other places which I think Is true.

2} Fact- interior designers must be creative and really have an imagination so they can make different type of furnitures for there clients.

🌟🍼👶🏻Actor👶🏻🍼🌟

Reason- actors {actresses} are really good at remembering there lines when they have to start filming but it's not just remembering there lines you also must have confidence in what you do you have to show emotion even if your not even talking. And you must be strong and fit if you want to do your own stunts for example: in the movie Suicide Squad I saw a video of the actors { actresses} doing exercise and doing there own stunts I thought that it was really cool.

Note- I am gonna put random facts about {actors} and {actresses}.

1} Fact- Angelina Jolie did her own stunts while filming Lara Croft: Tomb Raider.

2} Fact- Tom Cruise made 75 million for his role in mission impossible 2.

🌟🍼👶🏻Website for visual artist👶🏻🍼🌟

http://mfadegree.org/2011/25-interesting-facts-about-famous-artists-you-may-not-know/

🌟🍼👶🏻Website for interior designer👶🏻🍼🌟

algedra.ae/en/blog/10-facts-about-interior design

🌟🍼👶🏻Website for actor👶🏻🍼🌟

https://www.thefactsite.com/2012/10/100-funny-celebrity-facts.html

I will be back to edit and revise if I get feedback.

Elenoa

2/21/2017 08:50:15 pm

WOW! I loved it ! You put your own twist on it! But you should read through it again you made tiny mistakes.

Mr. Redican

2/22/2017 08:18:30 am

@Jaci i think the fact about Leonardo da Vinci is amazing!

David.R

2/21/2017 06:59:48 pm

Photographer

-The biggest SLR lens made to date is the Carl Zeiss Apo Sonnar T*. It weighs 564lb/256kg and has a focal length of 1700mm. It is designed specifically for use with a Hasselblad 6×6 medium format camera, and was custom-build for an anonymous customer who had a particular interest in wildlife photography.

-The most expensive camera ever sold was a rare 1923 Leica camera, which went for $2.8 million at auction in Vienna.
Credits:https://www.buzzfeed.com/digitalcameraworld/21-photography-facts-you-probably-never-knew-6a8j

Professional Athlete

-Professional athletes include baseball, football, and basketball players, tennis players, golfers, ice skaters, skiers, stock car drivers, rodeo riders: anyone playing a sport for money.

- Professional athletes also face the constant threat of injuries that could end their careers. For these and other reasons, this kind of job can be quite stressful.
Credits:http://www.factmonster.com/ipka/A0934730.html

Artist

-The purpose of art is washing the dust of daily life off our souls,” (Pablo Picasso).

-The only painting sold by Vincent van Gogh in his lifetime was The Red Vineyard which was bought by the Belgian artist Anna Boch.
Credits:http://www.express.co.uk/life-style/top10facts/570443/Top-10-art

Amiracle

2/21/2017 07:21:21 pm

1.): YouTuber
to be good at gaming and recording video
2.): Actor
to be good at preforming on front of millions of people
2.): Directer
to be good at recording stuff and editing stuff

Amiracle

2/21/2017 07:49:13 pm

videos

Amiracle

2/21/2017 07:51:40 pm

1.): (YouTuber):
to be good at gaming and recording videos.
2.): (Actor):
to be good at preforming on front of millions of people.
2.): (Directer):
to be good at recording stuff and editing stuff.

Amiracle

2/21/2017 07:53:05 pm

(revised again)
1.): (YouTuber):
to be good at gaming and recording videos.
2.): (Actor):
to be good at preforming on front of millions of people.
2.): (Directer):
to be good at recording stuff and editing stuff.

Elenoa

2/21/2017 07:24:30 pm

@ Mr. Hong & Mr. Redican - Thxs for the feedback It really helped!

Dyamontae

2/21/2017 07:43:30 pm

1)actor
You have to be really convincing and not shy to do what the director asks and remember your lines so you don't mess up

2)athlete
You have to be fast and in shape to be a athlete and try to have good sportsmaship
Even though it doesn't always end up with everyone nice

3) singer you have to be loud and you can't be shy because you can't have stage fright when you are performing and be good at singing in any category

Avy

2/21/2017 08:42:29 pm

Athlete
Beginning and lower-echelon players in Major League Soccer make a minimum of $35,125 a year.

Professional athletes must:
Have good eyesight
Have good reflexes and coordination.
Perform well under pressure.
Be competitive.
Be disciplined.
Be prepared to travel a lot and/or relocate.

Actor

Becoming an actor is not the same as becoming famous as an actor.
The first is a skill that can be innate or taught.
The second is impossible unless you have true talent as an actor, which is different than being skilled, and which cannot be taught.
Experience does not translate into talent...

You can be an actor your entire life and never be famous, or you can act once and become world known.

Do not think that you can decide you want to be an actor, and that you will someday be famous. It doesn't work that way.

Talent is born, not taught.

Photographer

Say cheese… click, click, click…Photography is probably that simple today. Today everyone has a camera – at least those small digital ones and everyone merrily clicks photographs here and there – capturing moments and freezing time. But, we need to remember that even diamonds started off as coal. Today what’s easy in photography world was once a herculean task. Let us not waste time beating around the bush any further and learn 30 interesting photography facts that will simply blow away your mind.

Jared

2/21/2017 08:45:44 pm

A few of the jobs!
1: Home designer
2: Photgrapher because its cool
3: singer since I love singing.
I AM SO BUSY RIGHT NOW I GOT HOME SO LATE!!

Elenoa

2/21/2017 08:48:05 pm

Lighting tech
1) Every E.L.T ( Eletrical lighting technician) has to study the script and consult with the director to assess what lighting is required.
2)Basically they can fix anything on stage and any problems.

Photographer
1) The most expensive camera on the planet was a 1939 Leica O- Serice after it was sold for approximately $ 2.79 million dollar at a westlicht auction.
2)Photography was first used in the year 1839 by Sir John Hershel.

Visual Artist
1)The most expensive painting ever sold was Pablo Picasso's ' Les Femmes d'Algers" going for $179 million on May 11th,2015.
2) You also have to be creative and original . Take all your emotions and lay it out on a canvas.

Elenoa

2/21/2017 08:52:28 pm

(Revised)
Lighting tech
1) Every E.L.T ( Eletrical lighting technician) has to study the script and consult with the director to assess what lighting is required.
2)Basically they can fix anything on stage and any problems.

Photographer
1) The most expensive camera on the planet was a 1939 Leica O- Serice after it was sold for approximately $ 2.79 million dollar at a westlicht auction.
2)Photography was first used in the year 1839 by Sir John Hershel.

Visual Artist
1)The most expensive painting ever sold was Pablo Picasso's ' Les Femmes d'Algers" going for $179 million on May 11th,2015.
2) You also have to be creative and original . Take all your emotions and lay it out on a canvas.

Links: http://blog.tumbhi.com/photography/15-interesting-facts-about-photography-1880

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Lighting_technician
http://www.cbsnews.com/pictures/most-expensive-paintings-ever-sold-at-auction/

Chance

2/21/2017 08:58:41 pm

Career Cluster
(Football player/Athlete)

1.)Football is a popular sport in North American.
www.softschools.com
2.)Football was invented from rugby.
I remember reading that from some book.
3.)The top 3 wide receivers in the NFL is
-Julio Jones
-Antonio Brown
-Odell Beckham Jr.
Odell Beckham Jr. Should not be the third best he should be the best receiver in the NFL. The website is wrong.
www.profootballfocus.com

2.) actor

1. ) Robin Thickle is the son of actor Alan Thickle.
popcrush.com
2.)An actor is a person who acts, or has a role (Part) in a movie.
Wiki.kidzsearch.com
3.)Price died on April 21 2016 and he played in 9 movies.

3.) Basketball/Athlete

1. ) James Naismith, a teacher at a YMCA in springfield , Massachusetts , is credited with inventing basketball in 1891.
www.factmonster.com
2.) thr first "Hoops" were peach baskets and the backboard was wire. www.factmonster.com
3.)the game became a official Olympic event at the summer games in Berlin, Germany in 1936.
www.factmonster.com

4.)Dancer

1.) Dancers are elite athletes as well as artists.
www.artslaive.ca
2.) Dance is a integral part of live recorded performing arts and cultural industries.
www.kaplaninternational.com
3.)Dancers work really hard.
I made this up

(Fun Fact)
Odell Beckham Jr. Jr./Me is gunna be second best wide receiver right under Odell Beckham Jr.

Shaan

2/21/2017 09:03:34 pm

Here are my jobs

1:Photographer.
Fact 1:My Uncle is a photographer.
Fact 2: To be a photographer you need steady hands

2:Athlete
Fact 1: You need to be really good at the sport you play and very dedicated at your sport
Fact 2: You have to be fit and healthy.

3:Singer
Fact 1: You need to have a good voice to be a singer.
Fact 2: You can't be shy or else you will freeze in front of a huge crowd.

Chance

2/21/2017 10:26:29 pm

@Shaan- Mr.Hong said to put 2 facts. But I like that you put the skills

Chance

2/21/2017 10:27:51 pm

@Shaan also you have to put the sources.

Jacob

2/21/2017 09:16:48 pm

Actor
You have to be good at looking cool doing things
And having a loud voice.

Directer
To be good at Organizing things and dealing with lots of mistakes.
Because the Actors might mess up a lot.

Youtube
You have to talk loud but not to loud.To be in a good mood so you dont sound sound sad.

Jacob (Revised)

2/21/2017 09:59:52 pm

Actor
Acting is a craft like art
In ancient Greek acting was done in large outdoor theaters

Director

A director is a person that is in charge of a film.
The director can also be a actor in the film

Youtuber
Like art having your own style is very important to becoming successful
Meeting new people from all over the world

Links
http://www.encyclopedia.com/literature-and-arts/performing-arts/theater/acting

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Film_director

https://www.theodysseyonline.com/5-fun-facts-about-being-youtuber

Jacob (revised)

2/21/2017 10:01:38 pm

Actor
Acting is a craft like art
In ancient Greek acting was done in large outdoor theaters

Director
A director is a person that is in charge of a film.
The director can also be a actor in the film

Youtuber
Like art having your own style is very important to becoming successful
Meeting new people from all over the world

Links
http://www.encyclopedia.com/literature-and-arts/performing-arts/theater/acting

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Film_director

https://www.theodysseyonline.com/5-fun-facts-about-being-youtuber

Jaci (Revised hopefully I fixed it!!.)

2/21/2017 10:11:34 pm

🌟🍼👶🏻Job👶🏻🍼🌟

🌟🍼👶🏻Visual Artist👶🏻🍼🌟

Reason- I picked visual artist because they can do a custom made portrait just for you.

Note- I couldn't find anything interesting about visual artists that I thought was good so I am gonna just write about 25 amazing interesting facts about famous artist that you may not know.

1} Fact- John James Audubon painted 435 birds in his lifetime.

2} Fact- Leonardo da Vinci was really sensitive when it came towards animal cruelty that he even brought a cage of birds to set them free.

🌟🍼👶🏻Interior designer👶🏻🍼🌟

Reason- they can do anything that you want them to do they can even pick any pattern that you please for your interior. I wouldn't mind being an interior designer because I would like to make custom made furniture for my family and friends. I would even make my self rococo furniture because they remind me of furniture that would be in a big expensive mansion. And the style rococo reminds of the 1800's :3.

1} Fact- interior designers don't just stick to fixing houses they also help furnishings and designing restaurants,airports,hotels and other places which I think is true.

2} Fact- interior designers must be really creative and they also have to have an imagination so they can make different type of furniture for there clients.

🌟🍼👶🏻Actor👶🏻🍼🌟

Reason- actors {actresses} are really good at remembering there lines when they start filming but it's not just remembering lines you also must have confidence in what you do you have to show emotion even if your not talking. And you have to be strong and fit if you want to do your own stunts for example: in the movie Suicide Squad I saw a video of the actors {actresses} doing exercise and doing there own stunts. I think that's really cool of them doing there own stunts.

Note- I am gonna put random facts about {actors} and {actresses}

1} Fact- Angelina Jolie did her own stunts while filming Lara Croft: Tomb Raider.

2} Fact- Tom Cruise made 75 million for his role in mission impossible 2.

🌟🍼👶🏻Website for visual artist👶🏻🍼🌟

http://mfadegree.org/2011/25-interesting-facts-about-famous-artists-you-may-not-know/

🌟🍼👶🏻Website for interior designer👶🏻🍼🌟

algedra.ae/en/blog/10-facts-about-interior-design

🌟🍼👶🏻Website for actor👶🏻🍼🌟

https://www.thefactsite.com/2012/10/100-funny-celebrity-facts.html

Tamim

2/22/2017 04:27:28 am

1) actor
You have to be really confident and not be shy at all to go on stage say or do what the next lines said if your shy you will meet up a lot
2) athlete
If you want to be a athlete you have to be in shape have really goood sportsmanship and also be focused on what your doing
2) singing
To be a singer you need to have a good voice and also don't be shy.A average singer makes up to 45,000 up to 65,00 per year

Vera

2/22/2017 06:57:40 am

Jobs
-singer I somwhat like singing
-athlete
-actor

Xaviery

2/22/2017 07:14:51 am

Author

- They get $5,000 in advanced for making the book. They get $1.25 per book and they sell 4,000 copies from around the world or more.

Drawing Artist

- An average sketch artist makes between $40,000 to more than $100,000.

Film Director

- When the film takes more than the week, directors on high-budget productions earned $4,127 daily pay. Short and documentary film directors took home $2,948 for a day of work in 2012.

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