WEDNESDAY: ARBORISTS AND THE SCIENCE CONNECTION

10/23/2013

Today was a wonderful day of learning! The students were able to see real-life connections from what they learned in Science to the real world! We had a special presentation today by some arborists who will be planting trees on our school grounds. They talked about the importance of trees and how they are essential to life! In addition to this, they also talked about photosynthesis, oxygen, carbon dioxide, and glucose. One teacher mentioned to me that all of the Division 4 students looked like they wanted to share their science connections with our special presenters.

LEARNING INTENTIONS: To convert incomplete sentences into complete sentences by using conjunctions (IE and, either, neither, because, etc), commas, and periods.

1.) LA:

Use what you learned today to improve the sentences in your passion paragraphs (Google Drive)
You must convert all incomplete sentences into complete sentences in all 3 of your paragraphs.
There is a QUIZ tomorrow and it will be based on this video. Be sure to review it!

2.) MATH 6:

Test must be returned and signed by your parents. Also, corrections must be completed.
Mid-chapter review must be completed, marked, and corrected.

MATH 7: Any assigned work.

3.) SCIENCE:

Make sure you have your piece of cardboard at school tomorrow. We will start our Food Web projects! (As long as it is about 30cm by 30cm, it should be fine.

4.) POST A RESPONSE:

Post one incomplete sentence or a sentence that is too long (from one of your passion paragraphs)
Then, post your revised sentence(s) by combing the shorter sentences together using conjunctions or by splitting up longer sentences to make shorter ones by adding punctuation.
Use this format: INCOMPLETE SENTENCE(S): _______

REVISED SENTENCE(S): ___________

VIDEO LINKS:
LA - Fragments/Incomplete sentences

xLio

10/23/2013 08:11:04 am

FIRST!

xLio

10/23/2013 08:20:16 am

Incomplete version:
HERE IS 30 SECONDS ON THE CLOCK MESSI PASSES THE VERY LAST DEFENDER SHOOTS A CURVED BALL HITS THE POST AND GOES IN BARCELONA FC WINS THE FIFA CUP

Complete Version:
HERE IS 30 SECONDS ON THE CLOCK, MESSI PASSES THE VERY LAST DEFENDER, SHOOTS A CURVED BALL, HITS THE POST AND GOES IN! BARCELONA FC WINS THE FIFA CUP!

xLio link

10/23/2013 10:09:37 am

Incomplete version:
THERE IS 30 SECONDS ON THE CLOCK MESSI PASSES THE VERY LAST DEFENDER SHOOTS A CURVED BALL HITS THE POST AND GOES IN BARCELONA FC WINS THE FIFA CUP

Complete Version:
THERE IS 30 SECONDS ON THE CLOCK, MESSI PASSES THE VERY LAST DEFENDER. HE THEN SHOOTS A CURVED BALL, HITS THE POST AND GOES IN! BARCELONA FC WINS THE FIFA CUP!

Gamer

10/23/2013 08:13:14 am

INCOMPLETE SENTENCE(S): _my dog is _very ____

Complete sentence My Dog is,very good.

Mr. Hong link

10/23/2013 08:22:24 am

@ Gamer - Is this a sentence from your passion paragraphs? Please re-read the criteria for the post.

Gamer

10/23/2013 02:24:54 pm

INCOMPLETE SENTENCE(S):
Two is cooking it,s nice because you can make stuff like a pie or Apple crumble or some thing completely different like teriyaki checkin and maybe pulled pork or fish you can choose anything in your hearts desire I mean everything you can think of so what would cook?

Complete sentence
Cooking is nice because you can make stuff like a pie or Apple crumble as sweets. Or some thing completely different like teriyaki chicken, pulled pork or fish. In the kitchen you can choose anything in your hearts desire..... This is the advantage of knowing how to cook.

Princesa

10/23/2013 08:24:04 am

33!!!!!!

Princesa

10/23/2013 08:31:31 am

First I have been doing square dance for 1 and this is my second year doing it is so fun at the end of the year you go to a big competition and can get awards and trophies.

First, I have been doing square dance for 1 and this is my second year doing it, it is so fun at the end of the year you go to a big competition and can get awards and trophies.

butterflypuppy

10/23/2013 08:38:40 am

the cats jump over the gate

The cats jumped over the gate.
_ ___ _
I underlined the parts were I made a change.

xLio

10/23/2013 08:40:06 am

You should remember your capitals always.

Spongebob

10/23/2013 08:45:50 am

@Mr Hong, I can't find any incomplete sentences.

xLio

10/23/2013 08:48:45 am

@ Spongebob mine too but then I just made one up from mine.

cookielover

10/23/2013 12:18:20 pm

SAME!!!

Ichigo

10/23/2013 08:47:26 am

Incomplete sentence (Run-on)
Do you want to learn new survival skill do parades and go skydiving You can!

Complete sentence
Do you want to learn new survival skill, do parades, and go skydiving? You can!

xLio

10/23/2013 10:14:13 am

@ Ichigo - I have another way you could put your sentence.

Do you want to learn new surival skills? How to do a formal parade AND go skydiving? With cadets, you can!

Spongebob

10/23/2013 08:49:04 am

Incomplete: Coco hits a walk off grand slam with two out and a full count in the 9th inning and the Red Sox win the World Series.
Complete: Coce hits a walk off grand slam with two outs in the bottom of the ninth. The Red Sox have officially won the World Series! Wow!

xLio

10/23/2013 10:19:55 am

No offence but the last part in your complete part is a bit cheesy, you might want to edit that.

theoverseeker link

10/23/2013 09:38:11 am

Incomplete: let me just tell ya i am a complete geek when it comes to video games if some person at best buy says that if you get this game its gonna be a really long game i ignore it because i complete them within the first week

complete: let me just tell you, I am a complete geek when it comes to video games. But if some person at best buy says, "if you get this game, its going to be a really long game." I try to ignore it anyways because, normally I would complete them within the first week I get them.

theoverseeker (REVISED)

10/23/2013 09:44:46 am

Incomplete: let me just tell ya i am a complete geek when it comes to video games if some person at best buy says that if you get this game its gonna be a really long game i ignore it because i complete them within the first week

complete: Let me just tell you, I am a complete geek when it comes to video games. But if some person at best buy says, "if you get this game, its going to be a really long game." I try to ignore it, because normally I would complete them within the first week I get them.

theoverseeker (REVISED #2)

10/23/2013 09:46:59 am

Incomplete: let me just tell ya i am a complete geek when it comes to video games if some person at best buy says that if you get this game its gonna be a really long game i ignore it because i complete them within the first week

Complete: Let me just tell you, I am a complete geek when it comes to video games. But if some person at Best Buy says, "If you get this game, its going to be a really long game." I try to ignore it, because normally I would complete them within the first week I get them.

xLio

10/23/2013 10:12:33 am

Congrats on trying to always improve your work!

xLio

10/23/2013 10:18:01 am

I forgot to add, you can't start a sentence with "but".

cookielover

10/23/2013 12:21:26 pm

YOU REVISED TWO TIMES I WOULD NEVER DUN THAT.

sSwaggerPuffBoy

10/23/2013 10:13:31 am

@ Mr Hong- You never gave us the form for the monster mash

xLio

10/23/2013 10:16:18 am

I thought he did??? Anyways I can't go because of soccer practice. :D

Judy Moody link

10/23/2013 11:10:39 am

@swaggerpuffboy, We got them but you must have forgotten to take it off your desk. I suggest you just bring in the $5 tommorow and fill it out at school (you don't need any parent signature).

lnhlz

10/23/2013 10:21:34 am

COMPLETE

As the cook comes around he tries everybody's cake as he announces the winner! I love to bake it is awesome!!! I can bake cookies, cake, cupcakes and muffins.

INCOMPLETE

As the cook comes around he tries everybody's cake as he announces the winner I love to bake it is awesome I can bake cookies, cake, cupcakes and muffins.

xLio

10/23/2013 10:22:30 am

I think that you could add a comma after "bake" in the second sentence.

LNHLZ

10/23/2013 10:22:55 am

I cant watch the video my computer keeps freezing.

xLio

10/23/2013 10:35:23 am

That's weird. Try an iPod or seomthing?

lnhlz

10/23/2013 11:24:58 am

Don't have one at the moment..

xLio

10/23/2013 02:13:00 pm

It is just an animated Einstein talking about grammar and other LA stuff you could go to school early.

Icestone

10/23/2013 11:01:48 am

@ xLio - It's great that your coming here and giving feedback, but why? I'm thinking either you really like learning or you're really bored...?

Mr. Hong link

10/23/2013 12:08:34 pm

@ Icestone - The answer is clear! He loves learning just like all of you do!

cookielover

10/23/2013 12:22:57 pm

I WANT TO SEE THAT!!!!!!

xLio

10/23/2013 02:18:34 pm

Want to see what?

xLio

10/23/2013 02:07:27 pm

I am bored.

Icestone link

10/23/2013 11:05:40 am

This isn't a sentence from my paragraphs because I couldn't find any, but i'll make one up from my paragraphs.

Incorrect: Did you know that art isn't just with pencil and paper people think this but it's not true.

Correct: Did you know that art isn't just with a pencil and paper? Though this is what people are lead to believe, art is way more that just drawing.

:)

Icestone link

10/23/2013 11:08:13 am

This is my real first paragraph. What do you all think?

Art
~~~~
Did you know that art isn't just with a pencil and paper? Though this is what people are lead to believe, art is way more that just drawing. Painting, sewing, knitting and crafting are all part of it, too. Some art is just throwing paint on a wall, or cutting up shoe boxes and glueing them together. As you can see, art is a great way to use creativity to design anything. My latest project has been my Halloween costume. In fact, a great way to make costumes is to use cardboard to construct all the parts. Finally, I use InDesign to make graphics for school projects, birthday cards and posters. Art is a universal passion of many, many people. I don't think that there is a single person in the world who doesn't like it. Don't you think so?

lnhlz

10/23/2013 11:26:44 am

WOW That's really good.

Judy Moody link

10/23/2013 11:27:27 am

Incomplete sentence: Furthermore, horses are also really beautiful animals and their silky smooth hair is fun to brush.

Revised sentence: Furthermore, even when your not riding them, horses are very beautiful animals. They have such silky smooth hair, that makes brushing the horse easy!

SAM

10/23/2013 12:08:00 pm

INCOMPLETE:
I most of the time love to draw. But I dont think that my drawings are good some times. But when I work harder on my drawing I become better at it. It is just like practice!

COMPLETE:
I most of the time love to draw, But I don't always think that my drawings are good some times. But when I work harder on my drawing I become better at it. It just takes practice!

WHAT I DID:
I fixed some grammar issues and I combined a part of the sentence by adding a comma were I once had a period.

cookielover

10/23/2013 12:24:09 pm

I liked that you put what you did.

Mr. Hong link

10/23/2013 01:31:13 pm

@ Sam - AWESOME! I am so proud as a teacher that you put another section called, "What I did!" You are truly taking ownership of your learning! You serve as a role model for your entire class! :-)

cookielover

10/23/2013 12:17:00 pm

INCOMPLETE
SENTENCE: GOAL! Logan picks up another goal today I choose soccer because it's a super fun sport to play you get to feel like your a part of a team and you make friends in the process.

REVISED
SENTENCE: GOAL! Logan picks up another goal today. I choose soccer because soccer is a super fun game to play. You get to feel like your a part of a team and you make some friends in the process.

Oracle

10/23/2013 12:30:16 pm

INCOMPLETE: I like to dream about them than having bad nightmares from movies, but I do like having nightmares at the same time
as dreaming as playing a game

COMPLETE: I like to dream about them than having bad nightmares from movies. I do like having nightmares at the same time as dreaming as playing a game.

cloud barston

10/23/2013 01:24:24 pm

incorect: George was gonna go to the super market when his brother reminded him to take his wallet with him he thanked his brother because he wouldn't be able to buy any fruit if he forgot it George left for the super market and he was glad that he didn't forget his wallet.

correct: George was going to go to the super market when his brother reminded him to take his wallet. he thanked his brother because if he forgot it he would not be able to buy any fruit. George left for the super market. he was glad that he didn't forget his wallet.

sSwaggerPuffBoy

10/23/2013 01:36:38 pm

Milenda bought furniture for everyone in her neighbourhood. Milenda was very popular in her area. When Milenda stepped out her door she saw balloons and lots of people from her area.
COMPLETE.

A girl that lived in a house bought furniture for lots of people. She was popular for a long time when she stepped out she saw people. INCOMPLETE.

Yogi Bear

10/23/2013 01:37:58 pm

Incomplete sentence: Ronaldo shoots he scores everyone celebrated his goal!

Complete sentence: Ronaldo shoots...he scores! Everyone celebrates his fantastic goal as fans are screaming and cheering for him.

Pancake

10/23/2013 02:11:19 pm

Incomplete Sentence: The final reason acting is my passion is the people you meet there are kind nice people you meet on film sets in theatre.
Revised Sentence: The final reason acting is my passion is the people you meet, there are kind nice people you meet on film sets in theatre.

tarantula

10/23/2013 02:22:43 pm

RUN ON SCENTANCE:I love scootering the thrill of going of jumps the great feeling when you land a trick for the first time oh what fun.
REVISED SCENTANCE: I really love scootering. The thrill of going over jumps, the great feeling of landing a trick for the first time. Oh boy it's fun

ATV BOY

10/23/2013 02:30:40 pm

Incomplete sentence.
Scootering is fun and I like going off jumps and learning new things.
Complete sentence.
I think scootering if fun. I like going off jumps, also learning new things.

Teddy bear

10/23/2013 02:57:43 pm

Incomplete sentence
I was going to the school and I fell down and I cry.

Complete sentence
I was going to the school,suddenly I fell down. It was hurt so I cried.

Bobby Orr

10/24/2013 12:45:58 am

Hockey I love hockey it is so much fun and it is in my blood my family has played it my brother and my dad. Another reason I like hockey is because I like traveling and winning hockey tournaments that is the best feeeling. But it is not better then stopping the puck that feels so good. And that is why I am passionate about hockey.

Greg Heffley

10/24/2013 01:05:09 am

Incomplete sentence:
The rope tightens and then as the pilot adds another finger his thumb is up as well as his two fingers and the ground crew shouts once more " ALL OUT " the pilot goes full speed and takes off towing the glider with him.
Complete sentence:
The rope tightens and then as the pilot adds another finger. His thumb is up as well as his two fingers and the ground crew shouts once more: " ALL OUT!” The pilot goes full speed and takes off towing the glider with him.

Juliette

10/24/2013 01:21:19 am

INCOMPLETE SENTENCE
finally you get to create moves that almost make a story, you get to stay fit while having fun and you get to travel the world.

COMPLETE SENTENCE
In conclusion I like dance because you get to create a dance that almost make a story, you get to stay fit while having fun, and you could travel the world.

Fish sticks

10/24/2013 01:22:43 am

Incomplete sentence: Piano is life I love piano because the sound is so beautiful and peaceful.

complete sentence: Piano is like life. I love piano because the sound is beautiful and peaceful.

xLio

10/24/2013 10:19:40 am

Since I have nothing else to do till 6:15, I am going to give you feedback. You could do: Piano is like life. I love piano because of its' sound. It is very beautiful and peaceful.

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