Mr. Hong's Class - #THELEARNINGNEVERSTOPS - MR. HONG'S CLASS | BUILDING A COMMUNITY OF 21ST CENTURY LEARNERS THROUGH | CRITICAL THINKING | COLLABORATION | CREATIVITY | COMMUNICATION | SELF-REGULATION | FORMATIVE ASSESSMENT

POST A RESPONSE - SELF ASSESSMENT TOMORROW

6/21/2022

OWN IT!

Today, students had some time to work on their final powerful response documents. These will be due tomorrow! Final inquiry presentations will be due on Friday! We will be learning until the end! #TheLearningNeverEnds!

IMPORTANT:
1.) WE STILL NEED DRIVERS FOR PLAYLAND! ASK YOUR PARENTS!

LEARNING/PLANNER:
1.) LA/NOVEL APPROACH: Powerful response documents with T&L Questions and GOW due tomorrow.

2.) POST A RESPONSE:

We have been working on PARS the entire year! You have done a great job with it! Today, I want you to write a learning reflection about how you feel your writing has improved, what you have learned about the learning process (BIG 6), what you found worked well, what didn't work well, what could be better, etc.
LEARNING INTENTION: I can write an overall learning reflection on my experience this year with 'POST A RESPONSE' assignments.
SUCCESS CRITERIA:

1.) PARAGRAPH FORMAT: intro/body/conclusion
2.) GIVENS: Spelling, capitals, sentence structure, grammar, and punctuation.
3.) BODY: Includes enough support to complete a proper learning reflection according to the
learning reflection criteria.
4.) SELF-ASSESSMENT: Give one sentence as a reply to your original paragraph stating if you
met the criteria or if you need to improve.
5.) PEER-ASSESSMENT: Give at least one other student feedback to improve.
6.) REVISION: Post your revised/improved version. This does not mean change a couple words or
simply copy and pasting what you wrote originally.

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OWNERSHIP

Jeremy

6/21/2022 03:13:28 pm

1st

Ella

6/21/2022 03:14:48 pm

2nd

Melissa

6/21/2022 05:09:49 pm

Beth

6/21/2022 05:27:31 pm

As Mr. Hong said, we have been working on our PARs for the entire year. As a result, I feel that my writing has improved. For the most part, I have improved in being concise, and using a larger variety of transition words. Furthermore, before this year, I didn't realize just how much of an impact the Big Six Learning Principles can make. For the past few years, I have been given success criteria, but it was never quite explicitly told to us what it was, and so I didn't pay as much attention to it. Now, I check over it much more often, and make sure I am meeting it. Another thing that wasn't explicitly labeled was descriptive feedback, self/peer assessments, and revision of work. Now, I consciously think about them, and do them more often. Finally, one thing that I haven't done as often in past years is Questions. I never really thought about how other people pushed my thinking, or how I got from Point A to Point B. Although, after learning about it, I realize that it is quite useful, and has helped me expand my learning and learn how I improved, and how I can improve in the future. Generally, something that works for me when I complete my PAR is receiving descriptive feedback from others. This way, I can see other people's views and opinions, and make realizations on what I can improve; often I don't know how. Another thing that I think works well is to look at other people's paragraphs after I complete mine to find inspiration for things that I can improve. To illustrate, if someone was nicely concise in their paragraph, I can look at mine and see if my paragraph could be more concise. On the other hand, something that didn't work so well for me was self-assessments, because they ended up being minor things that didn't change much. Although, note that this only applies to the PAR, and not other things. Ultimately, PARs and the Big 6 have truly helped me see what helps me improve, and what is useful to me. I'm grateful for the experience and knowledge it's given me. Even so, the learning never stops!

Rhea

6/21/2022 06:45:06 pm

@Bethany Awesome paragraph!

FEEDBACK: Try to organize your points with coherent transitions. For example, you have a "finally" in the middle of your paragraph and another point after it. By changing up the transitions to make them in order, your writing will seem much more organized and easy to follow for the reader. Overall, your sentences flow very nicely!

Jayden

6/21/2022 06:48:06 pm

@Beth
"I'm grateful for the experience and the knowledge it's given me"
Change it to "I'm grateful for the experience and knowledge its given to me"
(revising this sentence is optional because I don't know if my suggested sentence is better, it may be false.)

Beth

6/21/2022 09:25:25 pm

SELF-ASSESSMENT: I could make a more engaging hook.

“What we learn with pleasure we never forget.” Alfred Mercier, an American writer. As Mr. Hong said, we have been working on our PARs for the entire year. As a result, I feel that my writing has improved. For the most part, I have improved in being concise and using a larger variety of transition words. Another thing that we have been working on for the entire year is the Big Six Learning Principles. Frankly, before this year, I didn't realize how much of an impact these principles can make. Looking back, I realize that I have been given success criteria for the past few years, but they were never as explicitly explained and implemented. Therefore, I didn't pay as much attention to it. Now, I check over the success criteria much more often to make sure that I am meeting it. A few other things that weren't quite so explicitly labeled are descriptive feedback, self/peer assessments, and revision of work. This year, I've begun to consciously think about them, and do them more often. A principle that I haven't done often in past years is Questions. I never thought about how other's pushed my thinking, or how I got from Point A to Point B. Although, after learning about it, I realize that it's quite useful, and it has helped me see what I did well, how I improved, and how I can improve in the future. Speaking of what I did well, I find that something that works for me in my PARs is receiving descriptive feedback from others. This way, I can see other people's views and opinions. To be honest, often I don't see how I can improve until other's show me. Another thing that I find works well is looking at other people's paragraphs after I complete mine to find inspiration for things that I can improve on. To illustrate, if someone was nicely concise in their paragraph, I might compare it to mine and check if my paragraph could be more concise. On the other hand, something that doesn't work so well for me in my PARs are self-assessments, because they end up being minor things that don't really change my paragraph. Ultimately, PARs and the Big 6 have undeniably helped me find what helps me improve, and what is useful to me. I am truly grateful for the experience and knowledge that they have given me. Nonetheless, the learning never stops!

Brendan

6/21/2022 06:32:35 pm

"Taking time for self-reflection about life leads to greater self-awareness which in turn leads to self-improvement." As expressed by this quote from Canadian curler Tracy Kennedy, reflecting on your own work is the most effective method to learn and improve in most areas of development. For this reason, it is essential that I write a learning reflection for every major assignment I have completed throughout this year and this includes my Post a Response paragraphs.

Personally, I think I met the learning intentions for all of the PARs posted because I always follow the guidelines for what I should be learning or improving on by finishing the assignments. For example, if the PAR was on explaining the Big Idea of a book you read, then I would first read the learning intention. Therefore, I would know that I should be learning the method to write a concise Powerful Response from this PAR.

By writing these responses, I have learned that all of the Principles in the Big 6 are keys to creating successful work. For example, the learning intentions and success criteria help inform me about the things I need to accomplish in order to achieve success. Likewise, asking questions, completing self-assessments, and receiving peer-feedback all allow me to continue improving my work, draft by draft. Finally, the ownership piece is the over-arching term for the Big 6 because it means that the students can fully understand and use the Principles in their work independently.

In terms of my posting frequency, I think this aspect of the PAR is definitely one of my strengths. To elaborate I had completed all three components required in the success criteria for almost all (if not all) of the PARs this school year. I found that giving feedback to a peer before beginning to write my own paragraph(s) worked well for me because I could then keep a mental note to avoid making the same mistakes others did.

To contrast, something I could still improve on is the conciseness of my writing. A piece of feedback Mr. Hong had given me was that I should work towards expressing my ideas in fewer words, as my paragraphs were often relatively long. Additionally, another thing that didn't work well was trying to make my response 'perfect' on my first draft. Using this mindset took an excessive amount of time to write because I was always trying to get everything correct, even though I could just improve on my revised versions.

At the end of this year, my writing has improved substantially since September thanks to the Big 6 Learning Principles. To illustrate, I've learned better vocabulary, how to improve my sentence fluency, and how to write more engaging introductions. These are all aspects of writing I didn't include well in my early PARs and that I have now incorporated into my writing.

For my future PARs, I can still continue to improve my vocabulary by learning new words I don't use regularly. As an extra, I could try giving feedback to a larger number of students as a way to boost everyone's learning. For instance, if the success criteria states that everybody should give feedback to one other student, then I could assess the responses of two peers.

In conclusion, the Post a Response assignments have been a great way for me to learn and improve in addition to the work done at school. What are your thoughts on your PARs this year.

Brendan

6/21/2022 06:52:28 pm

Self-Assessment: I can make it a lot more concise and check the GIVENS.

Taking time for self-reflection about life leads to greater self-awareness which in turn leads to self-improvement." As expressed by this quote from curler Tracy Kennedy, reflecting on your own work is the most effective method to improve and develop. For this reason, it essential that I write a learning reflection for one of the major assignments this year, the PARs.

Personally, I think I met the learning intentions for all of the PARs posted because I've always followed the guidelines for what I should be learning or improving on by finishing the assignments. For example, if the PAR was on explaining the Big Idea of a book you read, then I would know that I should be learning the method to write a concise Powerful Response from this PAR.

By writing these responses, I have learned that all of the Principles in the Big 6 are keys to creating successful work. For example, the learning intentions and success criteria inform me about the things I need to accomplish in order to achieve success. Ultimately, the most important principle is the ownership piece because it describes a student's usage and understanding of the Big 6 altogether.

Furthermore, posting frequently is one of my strengths because I complete all three components for almost all (if not all) of the PARs this school year. I found that giving feedback to a peer before beginning to write my own paragraph(s) worked well for me because I could then keep a mental note to avoid making the same mistakes others did.

To contrast, I could still improve the conciseness of my writing because a piece of feedback Mr. Hong had given me was to express my ideas in fewer words. Additionally, trying to make my response 'perfect' on my first draft didn't work well either. Using this mindset took an excessive amount of time to write as I was always trying to get everything correct.

At the end of this year, my writing has improved substantially since September thanks to the Big 6 Learning Principles. To illustrate, I've learned how to improve my sentence fluency and write more engaging introductions. These are all aspects of writing I didn't use as well in my early PARs, but I have since incorporated them into my writing.

For my future PARs, I can still continue to improve my vocabulary by learning new words I don't use regularly. As an extra, I could try giving feedback to a larger number of students as a way to boost everyone's learning.

In conclusion, the Post a Response assignments have been a great way for me to learn and improve in addition to the work done at school. What are your thoughts on your PARs this year?

REVISED

Kevin

6/21/2022 08:40:39 pm

@Brendan----Engaging PAR!

FEEDBACK:
Paragraph 1, "For this reason, it essential..." change it to "It's essential"
For paragraph 5, at the start, change "To contrast" to "In contrast"

Brendan

6/22/2022 03:19:22 pm

Taking time for self-reflection about life leads to greater self-awareness which in turn leads to self-improvement." As expressed by this quote from curler Tracy Kennedy, reflecting on your own work is the most effective method to improve and develop. For this reason, it’s essential that I write a learning reflection for one of the major assignments this year, the PARs.

Personally, I think I met the learning intentions for all of the PARs posted because I've always followed the guidelines for what I should be learning or improving on by finishing the assignments. For example, if the PAR was on explaining the Big Idea of a book you read, then I would know that I should be learning the method to write a concise Powerful Response from this PAR.

By writing these responses, I have learned that all of the Principles in the Big 6 are keys to creating successful work. For example, the learning intentions and success criteria inform me about the things I need to accomplish in order to achieve success. Ultimately, the most important principle is the ownership piece because it describes a student's usage and understanding of the Big 6 altogether.

Furthermore, posting frequently is one of my strengths because I complete all three components for almost all (if not all) of the PARs this school year. I found that giving feedback to a peer before beginning to write my own paragraph(s) worked well for me because I could then keep a mental note to avoid making the same mistakes others did.

However, I could still improve the conciseness of my writing because a piece of feedback Mr. Hong had given me was to express my ideas in fewer words. Additionally, trying to make my response 'perfect' on my first draft didn't work well either. Using this mindset took an excessive amount of time to write as I was always trying to get everything correct.

At the end of this year, my writing has improved substantially since September thanks to the Big 6 Learning Principles. To illustrate, I've learned how to improve my sentence fluency and write more engaging introductions. These are all aspects of writing I didn't use as well in my early PARs, but I have since incorporated them into my writing.

For my future PARs, I can still continue to improve my vocabulary by learning new words I don't use regularly. As an extra, I could try giving feedback to a larger number of students as a way to boost everyone's learning.

In conclusion, the Post a Response assignments have been a great way for me to learn and improve in addition to the work done at school. What are your thoughts on your PARs this year?

REVISED AGAIN

Rhea

6/21/2022 06:38:00 pm

PARs. Whenever the teacher says, “I am going to post a PAR tonight,” there is no doubt that everyone hears an internal groan sounding within them. However, in the long run, it is eminent that I have grown so much as a learner through completing PARs. Starting with the first stage of the Big 6, I think I have fully met the learning intention of doing all three components of the PAR (Posting, revising, giving feedback); every time, I ensure that I finish all three parts of the PAR carefully before posting it onto the website. In regard to what I learned, I gained extensive background knowledge in various concepts and subjects, such as belief systems, the Indigenous people’s history, and ecology; because each PAR is centered on a different topic, I can slowly gather bits of pieces of a multitude of various things. Rest assured, I still. Furthermore, I learned and improved in my writing skills; because I completed PARs, I now have my paragraph format solidified and writing techniques improved. When looking at strengths and stretches, I think my strengths are in writing the response; because I have done it many times, it is now a straightforward process to complete. However, I could benefit from improving in my revising stage. Often, I may simply change a few sentences or a few grammatical errors; I am not necessarily changing the way I write or organizing my ideas in a better format. Therefore, the next time I complete a PAR, I will take more time to carefully complete my revisions. To the student in Division 1, what have you learned through completing so many PARs?

Rhea

6/21/2022 06:41:43 pm

Self-assessment: I need to make my writing more concise, check my grammar, and reword some of my sentences.

PARs. Whenever the teacher says, “I am going to post a PAR tonight,” there is no doubt that everyone makes an internal groan sounding. However, in the long run, it is eminent that I have grown as a learner through completing PARs. Starting with the first stage of the Big 6, I think I have fully met the learning intention; every time, I ensure that I finish all three components of the PAR thoroughly, In regards to what I learned, I gained extensive background knowledge in various concepts, such as belief systems, the Indigenous people’s history, and ecology; because each PAR is centered on a different topic, I can slowly gather bits of pieces of every subject. Furthermore, I learned and improved in my writing skills; because I completed PARs, I now have my paragraph format solidified and writing techniques improved. When looking at strengths and stretches, I think my strengths are in writing the response; because I have done it many times, it is now a straightforward process to complete. Rest assured, I still have room for improvement; improving on my revising stage is one of them. Often, I may simply change a few sentences or a few grammatical errors; I am not necessarily changing the way I write or organizing my ideas in a better format. Therefore, the next time I complete a PAR, I will take more time to carefully complete my revisions. To the students in Division 1, what have you learned through completing so many PARs?

Jayden

6/21/2022 06:42:01 pm

@Rhea
Please split the paragraph just like I did.

Beth

6/21/2022 09:34:11 pm

@Rhea - You're paragraph is very well-written!

FEEDBACK:
1. Instead of saying, "there is no doubt that everyone makes an internal groan sounding," you could say, "there is no doubt that everyone makes an internal groaning sound," as it makes more sense.
2. When you said, "Furthermore, I learned and improved in my writing skills; because I completed PARs, I now have my paragraph format solidified and writing techniques improved," it's a little bit repetitive, so perhaps you could omit the "I learned and improved in my writing skills."

Otherwise, you're paragraph looks great! I love the detail.

Iker

6/21/2022 06:49:41 pm

What is a daily thing we have done in school? My answer would be a par. This have definitely helped me in my learning for example about my writing skills. But how well have I kept up with the par over the year? Well when it started I was doing pretty decent. What I mean by that is i was able to do the par and sometimes give feedback, But one this is that I never really did my self assessment. Then it was after winter break where I just stopped doing the par for a while and it was affecting my grade a bit more than i expected and even the teacher told me about it. So i started to do the par more at April like how i did. Then our teacher wanted us to end the year strong with good pars which meant in my mind do the self and peer assessment and revise so i did just that till now and it now made me at least better than before in N.A

Iker

6/21/2022 06:58:10 pm

self assessment : check for the givens, and add a conclusion

What is a daily thing we have done in school? My answer would be a par. This have definitely helped me in my learning for example about my writing skills. But how well have I kept up with the par over the year? Well when it started I was doing pretty decent. What I mean by that is i was able to do the par and sometimes give feedback, But one this is that I never really did my self assessment. Then it was after winter break where I just stopped doing the par for a while and it was affecting my grade a bit more than I expected and even the teacher told me about it. So I started to do the par more at April like how I did. Then our teacher wanted us to end the year strong with good pars which meant in my mind do the self and peer assessment and revise so I did just that till now and it now made me at least better than before in N.A. In conclusion i have went from just doing one part of my par to not doing it to doing all the steps in a par.

Iker

6/21/2022 07:18:48 pm

Revised

What is a daily thing we have done in school? If you would've ask me My answer would have been post a response also known as par. This has definitely helped me in my learning for example on my writing skills and my reading. But how well have I kept up with the par over the year? Well when we started doing pars I was doing pretty decent. What I mean by that is i was able to do the par and sometimes give feedback, But one this is that I never really did my self assessment or revise. Then it was after winter break where I just stopped doing the par for a while and it was affecting my grade a bit more than I expected and even the teacher told me about it. So I started to do the par more at April like how I did. Then our teacher wanted us to end the year strong with good pars which meant in my mind do the self and peer assessment and revise so I did just that till now and it now made me at least better than before in N.A. In conclusion i have went from just doing one part of my par to not doing it to doing all the steps in a par.

Vernice

6/21/2022 07:23:45 pm

For your next one
@Iker-Good job on explaining
Feedback: Check the capitals

Jayden

6/21/2022 06:51:40 pm

As we've been working on our post a response every day this year, I began to learn about the big 6 learning principles. My grammar had also improved a lot too.

There are also 3 components for the post a response which is feedback, revising, and posting. As I did my post a response every day this year I began to get used to these 3 components.

The success criteria helped me understand what I am really trying to write about. I also learned how to improve on my grammar.

A way to improve on my post a response is to get descriptive feedback from one of you classmates.

As it it almost the end of the year I am improving on my vocabulary, assessing my classmates, and taking feedbacks I received.

In a ending, I am thinking that I will continue to work on all my PARs to go above extending which is hard to achieve and since my writing skills are bad I can finally got a chance to improve on my writing skills this year.

Brendan

6/21/2022 06:56:23 pm

@Jayden- Great job!

FEEDBACK: Add a hook and commas after all transitions.

Iker

6/21/2022 07:13:23 pm

Nice job

Feedback: explain each of the components like on the 2nd on try to get a example from a pass par.

ASH

6/21/2022 10:15:13 pm

@Jayden- Great job!

FEEDBACK: Fix some grammar mistakes
FEEDBACK: You reapeted "it" twice
Overall, great job!

Vernice

6/21/2022 07:18:56 pm

Write. Post. Revise. These are the three words that PAR, Post And Response. Each time we have a PAR the learning intention is slightly different, but I can always attain the learning intention. I learned the importance of revision and different writing techniques from the PARs. When I started writing PARS, I could only write a paragraph with a few sentences with bad structure and grammar. Then, slowly with the feedback I received from my peers and revision I could write a structured paragraph. Moreover, I learned variety of writing techniques, such as using transitional words to let paragraph flow and write actively. Before I always use passive voice to write, now I can write actively allowing my readers to stay engaged. Furthermore, I have multiple stretches and strengths in my PARs. One stretch I have is checking the givens. Although I have improved, it is still a problem for me. My strength is revising based on feedback. In conclusion, I will continue working on my PARs and apply the things I learned into my future writings.

Vernice

6/21/2022 07:21:02 pm

Check Givens

Vernice

6/21/2022 07:21:59 pm

REVISED
Write. Post. Revise. These are the three words that describe PAR, Post And Response. Each time we have a PAR the learning intention is slightly different, but I can always attain the learning intention. I learned the importance of revision and different writing techniques from the PARs. When I started writing PARS, I could only write a paragraph with a few sentences with bad structure and grammar. Then, slowly, I could write a structured paragraph with the feedback I received from my peers and revision. Moreover, I learned a variety of writing techniques, such as using transitional words to let paragraphs flow and write actively. Before I always use passive voice to write, now I can write actively allowing my readers to stay engaged. Furthermore, I have multiple stretches and strengths in my PARs. One stretch I have is checking the givens. Although I have improved, it is still a problem for me. My strength is revising based on feedback. In conclusion, I will continue working on my PARs and apply the things I learned to my future writings.

Caroline

6/21/2022 09:52:45 pm

@Vernice- I like how you gave examples of how you improved your PAR!

Feedback: Maybe add certain words to make your sentences flow more nicely. (Example: ...apply the things I have learned into my future writing...)

Sam

6/21/2022 07:53:52 pm

We have been working on pars for the whole year. At the start of the year, I really enjoyed because it was something new. Now I don’t like it as much i’ve got used to it it’s like the same thing every day. I think I am good at my structure intro, body and conclusion. Firstly I always look at the learning intention to see what I read about. Secondly I write my intro you should probably make it interesting because it’s like your introduction to your paragraph. Thirdly I write my body,It is like the main topic you are going to State. But remember to back it up with a supporting sentence. Lastly I always write a conclusion sentence to wrap up your idea. Make it interesting though. Overall I think pars are good because they comprehend your writing skills and your grammar. We can even help with spelling. Next year I hope you continue pars and carry on the learning. THE LEARNING NEVER STOPS.

Kevin

6/21/2022 08:25:09 pm

This school year, we have been working hard on posts and responses. The main reason why we are doing this is to improve our writing skills through self-assessment and peer feedback. Reflecting on your work is one of the most effective ways to learn and improve. As it is almost the end of the year, it's time to reflect on some major assignments. Through posts and responses, I have improved numerous writing skills like spelling, punctuation, and most importantly, grammar. From the start of the year till now, my grammar had improved significantly. If you go back and compare one of the PARs that I wrote at the start of the year and compare it to recent PARs, you will see what I mean. Before this school year, parts of the Big 6 like the success criteria has been mentioned but were never actually shown clearly to us of what it is. For that reason, most of us didn't pay much attention to it. The part of the big 6 that I feel like I improved most is peer feedback. We have practised a lot of peer feedback this year and made sure we got feedback before we hand in the final version of the work. For posting frequency, I did most of the PARs and only missed out on a few, I'd say this is one of my strengths. For my stretches, I'd say it's completing all three components as the success criteria stats. Sometimes I only do the PAR and do not give anyone feedback and do not do a self-assessment. But later, I realized the importance of completing all components of the PAR and taking ownership of my learning. To improve my PARs, I feel like I can make my paragraphs more engaging. I can use more complex words and words that I don't use as much to achieve this. To conclude, PARs are a great way to learn and improve your writing and the use of the big 6. What are your thought on Post and responses?

Angela

6/21/2022 09:06:10 pm

The first time when I did par, I kept up, but, however over time I was not as motivated as catching up to my pars. The par helped me improve my sentence structures when I look over my work, and it always reminds me to revise my pars. When I revised my par i gained experience when I corrected my mistakes, these are the things i learn through out the year when i do my par.

Melissa

6/21/2022 09:07:15 pm

Great par Angela! Make sure to re check your grammar, and place commas 😀

Angela

6/21/2022 09:53:36 pm

Revised

The first time I did par, I kept up, but, however, over time I was not as motivated as catching up to my pars. The par helped me improve my sentence structures when I looked over my work, and it always reminds me to revise my parts. When I revised my par, I gained experience; when I corrected my mistakes; these are the things I learn through out the year when I do my part.

Gen

6/21/2022 11:35:33 pm

@Angela
Nice work Angela!
Little feedback for you, you should check your punctuation and your spacing.
But overall Good Job!

Caroline

6/21/2022 09:42:53 pm

Through the entirety of Grade 7, our class has been doing PARs. From doing these Post a Responses, I feel both my writing and paragraph structure has improved. For the most part, I think that I've done a good job at doing all the components of the PAR throughout the whole year. From the Big 6 Learning Principles, following the success criteria has really been engrained in my mind. There was always a criteria in my previous years of being at school, but it wasn't really emphasized as much. Now, I know that in order to reach success, you have to follow the criteria exactly. Coincidently, I think that the success criteria is a very useful part of the PAR, (and learning in general) because it makes everything much clearer on what you need to do to get a good mark. In my opinion, something that wasn't as useful for me while doing the PAR was the self-assessment component. Not a lot of stuff in my writing actually changed, because I fixed most of the errors that I had and added more detail before I posted it. Because the PARs generally take me longer, because I am a slower writer, I am sometimes too lazy and tired to give myself "amazing" feedback, when it doesn't look like there is a lot to change. In conclusion, the doing the PARs for a whole year have improved my writing, and made me more diligent with my work, which is good preparation for high school.

Caroline

6/21/2022 09:44:42 pm

self-assessment: I should change some of my wordings to improve the flow of my writing.

Caroline

6/21/2022 09:46:38 pm

Through the entirety of Grade 7, our class has been doing PARs. From doing these Post a Responses, I feel both my writing and paragraph structure has improved. For the most part, I think that I've done a good job at doing all the components of the PAR throughout the whole year. From the Big 6 Learning Principles, following the success criteria has really been engrained in my mind. There was always a criteria for projects in my previous years of being at school, but it wasn't really as emphasized. Now, I know that in order to reach success, you have to follow not just some, but all of the criteria exactly. Coincidently, again, I think that the success criteria is a very useful part of the PAR, (and learning in general) because it makes everything much clearer on what you need to do to get a good mark. In my opinion, something that wasn't as useful for me while doing the PAR was the self-assessment component. Not a lot of stuff in my writing actually changed, because I fixed most of the errors that I had and added more detail before I posted it. Because the PARs generally take me longer, because I am a slower writer, I am sometimes too lazy and tired to give myself "amazing" feedback, when it doesn't look like there is a lot to change. In conclusion, the doing the PARs for a whole year have improved my writing, and made me more diligent with my work, which is good preparation for high school.

Rachel

6/22/2022 05:20:13 am

@caroline - Great job! Your paragraph was very descriptive, (btw I'm replying to your revised version.)

Feedback - I noticed you sometimes add these "extra" words to your sentences, for example in sentence 2, you wrote "...I feel both my writing and paragraph structure has improved." It's fine, though I would prefer if you didn't add it in because it makes the whole sentence seem a tad wordy.

ASH

6/21/2022 10:07:28 pm

Revise,write, self/peer assesment. What do all have in common? If you thought PAR THEN YOU MY FRIEND ARE CORRECT! Throughout the past year our class has been working on our PARs almost everyday and now there is only one more week left. Because of doing my PARs almost everydaymy writying has improved such as grammar, puncuation and spelling. I think what I did best on PARs this year that I was always online when doing PARs and I've only missed 2-3 PARs this whole year. Maybe next time I should improve on managing my time. For example, I mostly do my PARs at night 9 at the latest and maybe i should my PARs by 6. In Conclusion, we are all reaching towards the end let's keep working only a week left!

ASH

6/21/2022 10:08:29 pm

SELF ASSESMENT: Fix spelling and some errors

ASH 2.0 (Revised)

6/21/2022 10:12:36 pm

Revise, write, self/peer assessment. What do we all have in common? If you thought PAR, THEN YOU MY FRIEND ARE CORRECT! Throughout the past year, our class has been working on our PARs every day and now there is only one more week left. Because of doing my PARs almost everyday my writing has improved such as grammar, punctuation, and spelling. I think I did best on PARs this year because I was always online when doing PARs and I have only missed 2-3 PARs this entire year. Next time I should improve on managing my time. For example, I mostly do my PARs at night 9 at the latest and I should do my PARs by 6. In Conclusion, we are all reaching the end there is only a week left!

Winna

6/21/2022 10:56:49 pm

@Ash
FEEDBACK- write about what you did bad on, what worked good, and what didn’t
But yeah nice job

Jeremy

6/21/2022 10:33:21 pm

For the past 9 months of school, we've all been doing our PARs and we all have been improved our writing a lot. At the start of the school year I used to do it all the time but in the last couple of months I haven't been really catching up on my PARs because I didn't have the determination to do it. One thing that helped me improve my writing the most was the big 6 principles because. First of all, the feedback and self assessments helped know what I should have done better or should have added in next time. Second, revisions helping me by giving me practice correcting my self and helping know how I should do PAR next time. And one of my stretches are remembering to revise and give feedback to other people. One of my strengths are making my PARs in a paragraph format (intro/body/conclusion). In conclusion, even though I have improved a lot by doing these PARs I still have many things to work on.

Jeremy

6/21/2022 10:35:05 pm

Self-assessment: I should reword some of the sentences

Trevor

6/21/2022 10:37:12 pm

Trevor

6/21/2022 10:38:09 pm

accidentally posted this I will continue my writing

Jeremy-(Revised)

6/21/2022 10:41:19 pm

For the past 9 months of school, we've all been doing our PARs and have been improving our writing a lot. At the start of the school year I used to do my PAR all the time but after a while I haven't been really catching up on my PARs because I didn't have the determination to do it. One thing that helped me improve my writing the most was the big 6 principles because. First of all, the feedback and self assessments helped know what I should have done better or should have added in next time. Second, the revisions helped me by giving me practice correcting my work and making it better. And, my stretches are remembering to revise and give feedback to other people. My strengths are making my PARs in a paragraph format (intro/body/conclusion) and checking the givens. In conclusion, even though I have improved a lot by doing these PARs, I still have many things to work on.

Trevor

6/21/2022 11:08:50 pm

@Jermey Nice PAR
Feedback: Try not to start a sentence with 'AND'

Jeremy-(Revised 2)

6/22/2022 08:27:28 am

For the past 9 months of school, we've all been doing our PARs and have been improving our writing a lot. At the start of the school year I used to do my PAR all the time but after a while I haven't been really catching up on my PARs because I didn't have the determination to do it. One thing that helped me improve my writing the most was the big 6 principles because. First of all, the feedback and self assessments helped know what I should have done better or should have added in next time. Second, the revisions helped me by giving me practice correcting my work and making it better. My stretches are remembering to revise and give feedback to other people. My strengths are making my PARs in a paragraph format (intro/body/conclusion) and checking the givens. In conclusion, even though I have improved a lot by doing these PARs, I still have many things to work on.

Winna

6/21/2022 10:53:19 pm

P.A.R.S everyday may seem boring, useless and a waste of time. However, it’s actually not. Whenever you press the ‘Submit’ button, you improve your writing, because every P.A.R. you do makes an improvement. You get better at writing every time with the criteria we have. Some writing improvements I made are grammar, using better words and tenses. Something that I think I did good on is completing every P.A.R. until one time when I had a class that ended very late and I totally forgot to copy and paste it back on Mr. Hong’s website. Something I could have improved on is finishing every task - post, revise and feedback. I always forget about the last two. I also found out I haven’t been really paying attention to the website as often as I did before. (Starting from May) I think it’s disappointing to do that, so I should actually complete all the tasks and do other stuff on my device afterwards. I think I need to improve on completing all the requirements on the criteria. Also, I learnt to pay more attention to the criteria, because I usually only read the topic and skip all the other words. In conclusion, I want to improve and do my best for this last ‘less than a week’ week.

Winna

6/21/2022 10:57:58 pm

FEEDBACK- be more specific and clear

Winna

6/21/2022 11:04:16 pm

P.A.R.S everyday may seem boring, useless and a waste of time. However, it's actually not. Whenever you press the 'Submit' button, you improve your writing, because every P.A.R. you do makes an improvement for your writing. You get better at writing every time using the criteria Me. Hong sends out. Some writing improvements I made are grammar, using better words and tenses. Something that I think I did good on is completing every P.A.R. until one time when I had a
class that ended very late and I totally forgot to copy and paste it back on Mr. Hong's website. Something I could have improved on is finishing every task - post, revise and feedback. I always forget about the last two tasks/requirements. I also realized I haven't been really paying attention to the website as often as I did before. (Starting from May) I think it's disappointing for myself, so I should actually try to complete all the tasks/requirements, so I can do anything I want afterwards. I think I need to improve on completing all the requirements on the criteria. Also, I learnt to pay more attention to the criteria, because I usually only read the topic and skip all the other words. In conclusion, I want to improve and do my best for this last 'less than a week' week.

Winna

6/21/2022 11:05:28 pm

Kind of separated

Winna

6/21/2022 11:07:02 pm

P.A.R.S everyday may seem boring, useless and a waste of time. However, it's actually not. Whenever you press the 'Submit' button, you improve your writing, because every P.A.R. you do makes an improvement for your writing. You get better at writing every time using the criteria Me. Hong sends out. Some writing improvements I made are grammar, using better words and tenses. Something that I think I did good on is completing every P.A.R. until one time when I had a class that ended very late and I totally forgot to copy and paste it back on Mr. Hong's website. Something I could have improved on is finishing every task post, revise and feedback. I always forget about the last two
tasks/requirements. I also realized I haven't been really paying attention to the website as often as I did before. (Starting from May) I think it's disappointing for myself, so I should actually try to complete all the tasks/requirements, so I can do anything I want afterwards. I think I need to improve on completing all the requirements on the criteria. Also, I learnt to pay more attention to the criteria, because I usually only read the topic and skip all the other words. In conclusion, I want to improve and do my best for this last less than a week' week.

Winna

6/21/2022 11:07:48 pm

K whatever it’s fine

Gen

6/21/2022 11:32:32 pm

@Winna- Wow nice work Winna
You have a little bit of a mistake you don't need 's' the part "Makes an improvement."
Overall Great Job Winna!

Trevor (Revisied)

6/21/2022 11:06:19 pm

From the start of the school year, I still remember how everyone was really excited to post something on the website, until they found out it wasn't for fun. I feel that my writing has improve significantly, as I look back to my old writings, I said to myself "Is this even my own writing?". This year's PAR had really been a good experience and a check for writing to see where you have met the BIG 6 Principles. I have kept up really well on my PARs. I have missed two PARs in the whole school year with is not bad for my standard. If I have more time, I would like to spend more time own my PARs to make my writing more interesting, but it is fine as long as I am doing it regularly, I would say I am doing pretty good. To sum it up, I think elementary students should be doing PARs starting in Grade 5 to build up a better writing habit for grade 7 then high school, I hope my writing gets even better in high school, because soon writing essays would be a common thing to do in high school.

Trevor

6/21/2022 11:07:03 pm

Self-Assessment
I have met the criteria

Gen

6/21/2022 11:25:21 pm

First of all , You have to check the learning intention first so just to make sure that you are on the right path and on the right track. You should always check the givens
Secondly, You should write your intro like a hook so you can catch people’s attention.
Background about your intro.
Thirdly, you have to write down your body and you should include enough support to complete a proper learning reflection.
Lastly, you have to read your writing all over again so you can remediate your writing.

“Oh no, I have a lot of grammar mistakes, my capitalization, and my spelling has a lot of mistakes. What do I have to do now? I want to improve my writing.”
Time flies. I still remember when I was writing English for the first time, i thought i was doing completely fine. Then while growing up and reading my old notes, I was astonished by my writing. It was completely different how I write now. I enhanced my grammar, spellings, capitalizations, and punctuations etc.

Throughout the year we’ve been working on PAR’S since the beginning of the School year, so actually what is PAR? It means Post And Response basically it’s an assignment we get every week. The reason why we’re doing this is to ameliorate our writing skills. By writing our response and we read our writing all over again to discern our mistakes. Beginning of the year my writing our really messy and i ran over the sentences. I don’t even see my errors that time because I haven't learned English in a while.

PAR helped me a lot and the reason it helped me a lot was because people gave me feedback and corrected my grammar errors. I learned a lot about it that I should choose my words wisely because sometimes it’s not in the right spot like the word shouldn’t be there. I should inspect my spellings because sometimes instead of saying “It’s you have to say its” To be honest studying a new language is really difficult sometimes, because if you really like to learn the language it will be easier for you. The reason is pursuing what you like and you're really interested to that.

I’m pretty sure that my writing improved my grammar, punctuation, spelling, and capitalization. It took me a long time to improve my English. I wanted to learn it. Sometimes I just procrastinate and I don't finish work.

Gen REVISE

6/21/2022 11:35:49 pm

Self- Assessment: I should rearrange my writing it's really messy, I should check my capitalization and grammar mistake.

First of all , You have to check the learning intention first so just to make sure that you are on the right path and on the right track. You should always check the givens

Secondly, You should write your intro like a hook so you can catch people’s attention.
Background about your intro.

Thirdly, You have to write down your body and you should include enough support to complete a proper learning reflection.

Last but not the least, You have to read your writing all over again so you can remediate your writing.

“Oh no, I have a lot of grammar mistakes, my capitalization, and my spelling has a lot of mistakes. What do I have to do now? I want to improve my writing.”
Time flies. I still remember when I was writing English for the first time, I thought I was doing completely fine. Then while growing up and reading my old notes, I was astonished by my writing. It was completely different to how I write now. I enhanced my grammar, spellings, capitalizations, and punctuations etc.

Throughout the year we’ve been working on PAR’S since the beginning of the School year, so actually what is PAR? It means Post And Response basically it’s an assignment we get every week. The reason why we’re doing this is to ameliorate our writing skills. By writing our response, we read our writing all over again to discern our mistakes. Beginning of the year my writing was really messy and I ran over the sentences. I didn't even see my errors that time because I haven't learned English in a while.

PAR helped me a lot and the reason it helped me a lot was because people gave me feedback and corrected my grammar errors. I learned a lot about it that I should choose my words wisely because sometimes it’s not in the right spot like the word shouldn’t be there. I should inspect my spellings because sometimes instead of saying “It’s you have to say its” To be honest studying a new language is really difficult sometimes, because if you really like to learn the language it will be easier for you. The reason is pursuing what you like and you're really interested in that.

I’m pretty sure that my writing improved my grammar, punctuation, spelling, and capitalization. It took me a long time to improve my English. I wanted to learn it. Sometimes I just procrastinate and I don't finish any work.

Oriana

6/22/2022 12:33:56 am

PAR. Do you know what that is? Well, in Div. 1 we write pars almost everyday to expand our learning at home and learn about paragraph structure. We've been doing pars this whole school year, so I should be pretty good already, but there's always more to improve. So, how do I think I did on the pars this year, and what are some things I can improve on? Firstly, I think that I was able to properly follow the right paragraph structure on all of my pars, and that this was one of my strengths. Secondly, I think that I did well on giving feedback to others and making sure I did a self assessment. So, I think that this was also one of my strengths. Finally, I think that I did well in making sure I was checking the givens and didn't make too many grammar mistakes. However, I think that I could've improved on making sure I did it everyday, because that was one of my stretches. I think that I will be able to follow up with the pars this week and end the year off strong. In general, I think that I did very well in the first part of the year but it slowly declined, but that could change. Overall, I should remember to post everyday with a par, so that I can end the year off strong.

Rachel

6/22/2022 04:57:26 am

Our class' writing journey has come a long way, and our continuous practicing of pars has led us to a huge improvement within our writing. Approaching the end of the school year, I believe my writing has improved remarkably, primarily with my knowledge of transition words as well as my overall structure of my paragraphs. Moreover, I have learned much more about the Big 6 learning principles, for instance, synthesizing and evaluating. Before I learned about the learning principles, I didn't revise nor think about my work very often, so I easily made the simplest mistakes. Though I still do that now (accidentally), revisions with my pars have definitely improved my after results, and not only this, but I also believe that it was the thing that worked best for my paragraph's outcomes. Despite my progress, I still think I could/could've done better with my ownership phase, because lately, I've been missing out on a lot of my pars. It's something I feel like I didn't do well enough on, since I didn't use my time responsibly even when I was free. Of course, time management is something I will work on towards the next year, and I will also try to make sure I hand in my work on time regularly.

Rachel • revised

6/22/2022 05:10:54 am

Self-assessment - I could create a better conclusion.

Our class' writing journey has come a long way, and our continuous practicing of pars has led us to a huge improvement within our writing. Approaching the end of the school year, I believe my writing has improved remarkably, primarily with my knowledge of transition words as well as my overall structure of my paragraphs. Moreover, I have learned much more about the Big 6 learning principles, for instance, synthesizing and evaluating. Before I learned about the learning principle, I didn't revise nor think about my work very often, so I easily made the simplest mistakes. Though I still do that now (accidentally), synthesizing and evaluating my pars have definitely improved my after results, and not only this, but I also believe that it was the thing that worked best for my paragraph's outcomes. Despite my progress, I still think I could/could've done better with my ownership phase, because lately, I've been missing out on a lot of my pars. It's something I feel like I didn't do well enough on, since I didn't use my time responsibly even when I was free. Of course, time management is something I will work on towards the next year, and I will also try to make sure I hand in my work on time regularly. Although I started this year off strong, it's been lacking that towards the end, therefore trying my best to start and end my next year off with a bang is my goal and its a must.

Shawn (REVISED)

6/23/2022 08:12:08 am

What’s one thing we do everyday?
If thought of par then you’re correct.
Pars have a few components, Posting, peer feedback, self assessments and revising. If you can do all of these then you can do the par. That’s what the par is.

Bebe

6/23/2022 10:20:33 pm

We have done a lot of things this year, we have went on field trips, how to write essays, how to do algebra, etc. But one thing that we started doing from the start was our PAR. PAR stands for "Post a response" where Mr. Hong asks us do write about something that either we learned during the day or we did during the day. I have been doing my PAR at the start for about 1 to 2 weeks. Then I stopped for some reason. So I had to catch up on my past PARs in January. Then I continued to do it once every time he posts two PARs. I don't usually write revisions nor give myself self-assessment but I do my PARs as in the paragraph. I have definitely improved on writing over all my PARs. Ownership, maybe not so much though. I have improved on my abilities to focus while typing a PAR, because before I used to type my PAR then a notification comes up then I check it. Now I do it continuously. To me PAR had always been something I just wanted to get done faster but as I read more of other's PARs I felt like I have not done a good job. So this is my last par of the school year, I hope that this is going to be the best too. Thank you for making me do the par so I can work on my ability to focus.

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